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Thursday, 7 May 2020
The Evil Shoe Maker.
This week we have been describing different shoe makers from the video that we had to look at.
I have chosen to do the evil shoe maker.
He is a man who tries to take peoples shops.
He wears a tuxedo and is all fancy he also likes to take the customers.
He moves really poshly and is really fancy.
He dose shoe making for a living.
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Hi Fletcher, this is a good description you have written. I liked how you described the way he moved. I would have loved to see more detail on what you mean by "fancy". What made you chose the Evil shoemaker as your character?
ReplyDeleteHi Fletcher its Jayden I really like this piece of writing because it is really descriptive,i think you need to work on using punctuation. I've been working on the same thing!
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